A Review of otiro - logo draft 1 by Luke Marohn

This definately needs some work.

I can see where you are headed, but it just didnt work out.

here is what you should do..

1. Change the font, something similar, round sci-fi, but still really nice.
2. Make the bars have a similar width as the letters, and have them rounded so that that they fit.

I've attached an image