A Review of Personal logo by Nate Hamilton

I like the second, here are few thoughts I had though:

1. Make the text the same color as the stroke on the box. Deep purple I think. It messes with my eyes to have the color of the font and stroke be so close.
2. Align the second line to the left.
3. Not sure if this is the color palette you should use. They aren't very trendy or a typical artsy color scheme.

Keep tweaking this a bit...