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I think you are nearly there, but getting those small details right is exactly what's so hard.
i prefer the first one, but it's still not quite right. Perhaps do some more font searches for one that is just a slightly less heavy weight and has a bit more of an interesting r.
I also didn't get the face as an o at the end. The thickness of the line versus heaviness of font doesn't help, so a reworked font may sort that out.
I would also try out some different colours too. It could suddenly pop with a different combination.
