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Hi Jeremy,
I really like this and think it is an attention grabber. The only two things that I would suggest to possibly consider would be to bring "2PM," closer to "...09," and If the yellow poster/paper is supposed to look like it is actually part of the T-shirt then I would change the lighting on the yellow paper so it looks fitting and purposeful. Maybe consider tacking it on with a safety pin, clip or something to that extent.
If the yellow poster/paper is supposed to look slapped on, than I would try to make it distinctly that way. Maybe consider angling it a bit more, up size it a bit and/or even have it fall off the page a tad?
Right now, as you have it, it seems a bit in limbo.
I like your purposeful placement of the heading. All the words align to something and the word "University" leads the reader to the duct tape. As you trap the eye of the reader in the whitespace after "2pm" and the student it helps the "confined/trapped" feeling that your trying to generate.
