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This is a minimalist design no doubt...
However, in order for someone to hire you they really should be seeing your portfolio stuff, at least a little snippet...
I have hacked your design a bit, as I think that your call to actions, aren't really working for you...
I hope this helps!
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Ionut Resetar commented:nice one Aaron, very good idea, and the small caracter with the video camera can work on the left next to the heading "HELLO I DESIGN ..." like he is the one saying those thinks (him being you).
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Brian Wangila commented:
I have changed the layout. Please tell me what you think. Cheers
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Aaran Casey commented:Like it, don't really like the position of the "get started now" button, move it to the right on the grid, it looks like it's floating at the moment..
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As I commented on Aaron suggestion here is what I mean with that comment:
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Ionut Resetar commented:
now the thing is I would give a 4 to Engagement with Aaron suggestion implemented. It's much more attractive for the user if he can immediately see some of your work with out the need of a click from his part. One more thing, I think you need to add Portfolio and Get a Quote in the menu, up on the right corner.
You can make the image suggestion from Aaron a slideshow but as I learn from some very talented people here at concept feedback, don't make the slide auto advance, because the movement distracts the user from the content on the right.
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Brian Wangila commented:
I Have changed the layout to this one, the mascot at the top next to the headline. It looks much better with the character over. Now am trying to figure out a creative way to showcase my portfolio.
Thank you all :)
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Brian Wangila commented:
I have something that's been disturbing me... This is my first go at freelancing. What do you display in your portfolio page when you are still doing your first job?
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Ionut Resetar commented:
well ... your first job :), and until you have some more jobs you can display some personal stuff you have played with, maybe you did some other designs just for fun, or you have worked for a company and depending on your contract with them, you can add some of the work you created for them with details like "work done for blabla company - design and implementation" or something similar
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I think you can stay with your minimalist goals and put a bit more pizzazz into the site with the portfolio concept that Aaran posted. My comments are around your copy points.
Hello, I design cool websites (yay! If I am looking for a designer, I'm in the right place) and this is my online portfolio and cyber-home (not so good. now it's more about you and not about me.) Better would be something along the lines of "and I am ready to turn your dream into beautiful reality."
Now, if you use Aaran's suggestion, you don't need a button that says "check out my portfolio" but you still need a call to action. I'm not a big fan of "get a quote" -- that's more about "find out how much I'll charge you" and less about "find out how easy I am to work with" or "it's easy to get started!" I'd rather you use more statements like "get started now" or "tell me what you need."
The font inside the buttons seems mis-matched to the rest of the site. Is this form the only way to contact you? I'd like to see at least a phone number or other contact info directly on the main page.
And don't forget testimonials from satisfied customers are the best! Good luck.
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Brian Wangila commented:
Thanks for the feedback. I have changed the layout. Please tell me what you think. Cheers
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I agree with much of what Richard has written and Aaran has suggested. I would only suggest the following revisions to the text:
Heading: Hello, I design websites for business owners who want to look good, be found and attract new customers.
Subhead: I'll help you turn the brilliant vision you have for a blog, website or web application into a beautiful reality.
As Richard says, delete all the other self-serving stuff. Let the audience decide whether the site is cool – it's not for you to say; online portfolio and cyber home – who cares? Aren't they givens? Geeky stuff – again, who cares?
Business owners care only about what they GET, not what you DO. He wants you to make his business run smoother, make him money, enhance his reputation, stop his baldness and make him more attractive to women. Whoops, went a bit too far. But I hope you see the point.
His credo is: what's in it for me? Answer that question simply and effectively and you'll have customers beating a path for your services. Stray into self-indulgence and your marketing message will fall on deaf ears.
Hope this helps.
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Aaran Casey commented:
Bloody good comments here, and all are absolutely on the money...
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Brian Wangila commented:
Wow! I have learnt so much. I have tried to update the concept with emphasis on the client. What do you think?
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Steve Osborne commented:There doesn't appear to be any greater emphasis on the client from the original. "Cool"; "usable"; "that your users will love" are empty phrases and meaningless to your audience. And the subhead is still more about you than them. Throw it all out.
The portfolio placement is a definite improvement.
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I like their design especially the use of cool font...i am a sucker for fonts ...lol....not sure about the purpose though
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I like the granulated background to give it a paper-like feel. I'm also a fan of the 2 call-to-action buttons on top.
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Hi
I think you need some kind of colour splash. Maybe you can change the bg-color of the two big buttons?
Johan
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Brian Wangila commented:
Thanks. What do you think of the colour now? You thoughts are much appreciated
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hi Brian.. Nice start... :) i only want to say is if you are itself is designer.. then people will expect very innovative yet creative design from you.. ie. your portfolio.
Make & think something very creative and then see how it works for you.. :)
best of luck.
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Brian Wangila commented:
Hey thanks. I am trying out several ways of displaying my portfolio. Once I get one I will update the concept.
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Thank you. I was brainstorming on where to put the portfolio. Thanks for the idea. I will update it and post it up here