Superhero Avatar

very nicely designed, however, the big bold text (john antoni griffiths) is placed at a very 'uncomfortable' location/part of the image.. move it up or down..

Hi John,

Cool design!

The text looks flat despite being distorted for perspective. I think part of the reason is that you didn't rasterize the 4-5px stroke before applying perspective, i.e. the stroke remained equal across the board when it should be getting smaller when going from right to left.

Hope this helps!

Cheers

Noel

Background drowns out the awesomeness that is you. The black lines around each burst also seems superfluous. Agreed on the flat text. The font doesn't feel superhero-esc either.

The vector feel / look of the text and background clashes with the texture of the illustration. Work on the shading on your face a bit too.. Your chin light seems a bit bright, your mouth lines seem a bit too dark making you look like an old man. Great start though.

I like this!

One issue, the white of the collar doesn't contrast at all with the white bar going past it. It would be more impressive if the entire head/collar was surrounded by red. Also I agree that the text is at an awkward place. However that isn't really a bad thing and higher up or lower down might be less impact-full.

Hi John

Love the illustration style. The whole idea works very well for its purpose.

There are two (linked) areas needing attention. Firstly, the perspective is completely misleading. I can't tell whether it's deliberate, but judging by my second comment, I think not.

1. Correct me if I'm wrong, but it appears there are two intended planes. One is the overhead rays, which by going behind the figure, form a horizontal "roof". The second is the type, which should form a vertical plane – a transparent "wall" – emanating from the same source as the rays. This plane has been incorrectly drawn.

2. The type has been distorted incorrectly. Look at the G compared to the S, or the O in Antoni. There should be foreshortening applied on both axes.

I suggest aligning the bottom of GRIFFITHS to the horizontal and building the type from there, in the correct aspect. Crop the whole image immediately underneath, thereby deleting the legs. This will give the image a solid base from which to "grow".

Hope this helps.