Concept Reviews
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Hi Jason.
Here is what I think you can do to make this site better.
- Logo/Icon for the Site Name. It feels pretty bland there. also bring the phone number down and make it bigger, you WANT them to call... Or do you? :O
Add padding to the nav links, They feel smushed to me. I would also make the navigation bar a gray color, and when they hover over a link, it turns blue! EEEE!
as for the header, make the "be prepared" text WAAAY SMALL, and make it sit on top of Be Redi. Then, I would have a picture showing the product, instead of the little image you have now. What am i buying? I tooth shaped piece of paper with writing on it? Your target market are people who eat. Not all of them are going to be very bright crayons..if you know what i mean.. :D
Align the "learn moar and buy now links" to the left. make the buttons black or something, they are the only green thing on the site.
The checkmarks your using look really cheesy, go with more updated ones http://www.iconfinder.net
Strangle your children! Thats a keeper.
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Jason commented:
- I'm trying to expand my market haha.
- Will try that out.
- It's a small dental office in a small city that sells this, the website is just for getting the name out and ordering, calling is not a huge deal.
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Jason commented:
Sorry, CF changed my numbers to make a 'perfect' list for me, from the top it should be 1,4,5,6,2,1
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Hi,
I like the product idea, I used to carry around those floss sticks with me, but as they are rigid can be a pain when in the wallet.
"Be prepared. Be redi."
I would capitalise the 2nd words especially redi as its your product name. However I would change it to:
"Be Prepared Get Redi"
However getting a copywriter is invaluable so try and have a word with one once you have finished your layout.
The layout is a little too blank and the use of the photos does little to inspire the product, I also doubt you can legally use The Simpsons image.
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Jason commented:
Thanks for the review, be sure and read the concept description and the concept itself, both state that the simpsons image is just a placeholder and that something real will be replaced with it.
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Tom Foster commented:Why use an image place holder that will look nothing like the image that will be used in the final version? If you are trying to create a balanced design and get accurate feedback it needs to closely resemble your final idea. The Simpsons image does a number of things which damages your concept. It is incorrect in size/proportion, is squashed, uses bold colours. All these go against what you are trying to do.
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Jason commented:
You're right Tom, I assumed (I really did) that everyone would have a sense of humor and not take everything seriously. I'm sorry if you felt you wasted your time on it, I figured people would read the description and concept and get the idea that I'm now responsible for marketing as well (which is not in my job description) and didn't want to spend another week waiting to figure out what to put down there to make FLOSS more exciting.
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I like top and bottom.
Don't like the strangle your children. Funny like Axe could be funny, but not that one. Also rights. If you want to be funny show someone's teeth with big green stuff in it.
Consider fits anywhere 1st.
Are there any other benefits like scent or freshness?
Maybe instructions inside tooth can be in the main area and something more useful can be at the top. Like happy date scene with couple.
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Jason commented:
Thanks for the review, be sure and read the concept description and the concept itself, both state that the simpsons image is just a placeholder and that something real will be replaced with it.
I'll have to check on the scent. Thanks for that.
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so as I reviewed your previews concept I said that the header is to empty, the menu is not working well with the rest of the layout.
The green buttons don't fit in there and are to small and should be on the left.
just be prepared. be redi. is not enough there and is to big.
The content ... well I don't like the reflections on the images and you could work some more on that, play around with it more, and use different check icons.
I like what you did with the footer, and it's a good improvement from the last version, but you can do more ;).
Here is some idea, after 30 minutes of playing around with your design.
Cheers mate.
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Jason commented:
Thanks lonut, I'll try again later, this photo is not showing up for some reason.
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This product doesnt entice me to want to try it out. A promotional video showing some attractive females actually using the product should do the trick.
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Jason commented:
I'm not sure if you're reviewing my concept or the product itself haha. In any case, thanks for stopping by, I'll try to find some incredibly hott females with bad teeth to demonstrate before/after
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Thanks for your review!