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Concept Reviews
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This really is a lovely site and well targetted at its intended audience. The hand drawn font and other elements gives a nice individual feel to the site.
The two main glaring things which jump out at me are.
The spacing between the main navigation items isn't even. The US Decline has a disproportionally large space to the right. I think STEM Careers needs to move to the right to align with the right edge and then the others need to be horizontally evenly spaced between.
The second thing is that your paragraphs have a margins on the top of 20px and another 25px on the bottom. This is making huge gaps between your paragraphs so they don't look like they belong together - it's a massive 45px gap. This needs to be smaller so the paragraphs follow on from each other better. The larger gaps just need to be around the sub-headings.
The body font for the paragraphs seems large even on my Mac which normally shows fonts smaller than on PCs - the line height is nice though but maybe just a tiny bit smaller on the body copy so it balances better with the sub headings.
There is also a large horizontal gap between the end of the main content and the footer - maybe this could be closed up a little too.
Overall though this feels lovely, easy to use and informative with a great feel.
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Emma Simpson commented:No worries Jamal.
One thing you could do to help connect the maths/science element is to put the background image as scanned in graph paper which may help give that extra visual link to science related info.
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Jamal Jackson commented:
Emma, I implemented your comments on my site and would like for you to give it a look.Also, I'm not sure if what I did with the graph bg is what you meant.
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Emma Simpson commented:
Hi again Jamal, I had a look earlier and it wasn't what I meant. I got busy at work so couldn't reply then. Have done a quick search and found this which is more of the kind of graph paper I meant - something more like the stuff we used at school to draw science experiment diagrams on.
http://bit.ly/aFseiq
this one isn't perfect - the last time I did this, I got some graph paper and scanned it in myself so I could get it how I wanted it - nice and pale but still with some blue in.
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I don't get why you'd choose a paper theme what so ever. It has nothing to do with either science, technology, engineering or mathematics ..
The overal grid you have is good. Very nice and clear (apart from the few errors Emma mentioned).
When it comes to coding something must have go wrong. The width is huge without any reason (Safari)
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Jamal Jackson commented:
Kars, I choose to go with a paper and sketch theme for a few reasons: the common conception of this subject are viewed as boring and unexciting until something cool is done in them( much like how nobody pays much attention to a blank piece of paper until something is put on it, one of the site's main goal is to improve STEM education for grade schoolers and all school children use paper and have doodle while in class before. On the width, I think somebody messed with my code and have not attempted to fix it because I want to work out the design details first.
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I think this is a great design, but something just feels wrong anyway. These are my thoughts:
- Love the background, but the text is hard to read. I'm getting tired of reading on this background. How about a darker transparent background color and equal padding of the content? I made a quick mock-up to show you the thought.
- Decrease the line-height a little bit
- (Css) Just use margins/padding on the bottom of the paragraphs. That would make the titles more connected to the paragraphs while still giving them the right amount of whitespace.
- Give your sketches more color! http://www.ndesign-studio.com/ is a great source of inspiration.
Great design, but the text is just not readable enough. The low purpose rating is because of this. The content is obviously the most important thing of the design. A few adjustment would make this a lot lot better and more useful. Right now, it's not.
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Jamal Jackson commented:
Thomas, I think your the first person to notice that this site was inspired by ndesign studio. Your comments on the background make sense and I have added a darker overlay to it. It is live now if you want to view it. The rest of your comments were good as well.
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I agree with what Emma has said on spacing etc and like her idea of adding graph paper to the background to keep with the hand created feel but also to introduce a more mathematical feel to it.
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don't understand why you chose a paper and sketch theme. what does that have to do with science, technology, engineering and math?
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Jamal Jackson commented:
John, I choose to go with a paper and sketch theme for a few reasons: the common conception of this subject are viewed as boring and unexciting until something cool is done in them( much like how nobody pays much attention to a blank piece of paper until something is put on it, one of the site's main goal is to improve STEM education for grade schoolers and all school children use paper and have doodle while in class before. Also, can you elaborate on me providing focus and direction?
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Thanks for taking the time to leave this great feedback Emma.