BPM Magazine Advert

i like the way you've cropped the images at the bottom of the page~ it lends itself well to music energy/waves.

i would say the most important wording is "Event for DJs" so keep that large and noticeable.. i would suggest making the text smaller, and left align.. the justification is creating large unpleasant gaps in the text. rivers, and streams... are flowing through your information.

i think that the second one is better as well, just not sure on the purple.. keep adjusting this, you've still got some work to do.

i dont really like the "more" in front of the information.. i suggest getting rid of the whole "more" idea. "This year Europe's largest event for DJ's" .

is that a plate that you put the bpm on in the corner? or a turn table? make it clearer maybe.. help us make sense of whats going on. cant wait to see what you do with it!

As everyone else says the second is the best of these but really you have hit it on the head yourself in terms of them all being too corporate and confused

The reason the second works is that the logo in the top left is actually 'holding' the page - all the others lack a single big focus.

One thing which may really help is the font you are using for bpm - right now it's either too scripty in a bland way or condensed and bold but looks dated. The font alone could really help to bring this kicking into a more contempory arena.

If you have a look at the website for All Tomorrow's Parties Music festivals at http://www.atpfestival.com/ it may help inspire in a nice clean way to bring a more modern look.

Really bright colours - nice big block elements and modern fonts. I'm not keen on the multiple images some of which are repeated. I'd pick one or two and make them bigger to add impact.

Instead of having the three columns across - maybe try to get it all in one long vertical column which may look a bit cleaner and simpler and stop it looking so corporate.

Do something about the text, it's too much. Talk to the people, convince them that'll ruin the message. Also, as Miranda said, full justify looks bad - left justification is enough. Try to put it in one column if you can't cut it short.

Not much DJ-related graphics (I like the idea of vinyl player in #2 though - add more).

And emphasize the ticketing text - that's the "selling" part.

I agree with Michael, the second is much better but it lacks many things. When you think DJ event, you think music, electronic, vinyls, hot girls, lighting effects, club, dark, people, and none of these are presented in your design. Add some light effects in the background, put a girl somewhere, I would also use a picture of real turn table in the upper left corner and put your logo on top of the vinyl disc using some cool layer modes and masks.