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I like this design quite a bit, makes me want to go out and play some futbol! The only issues I have are with the typography. Typically, you don't want to mess with print that people need to read as you did with the "Coed Adult" paragraph. I like the sideways text but maybe do that with the heading "You are born, you will die..." I would keep all necessary content highly readable.
Good work so far!
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Great concept over all, very exciting and visually appealing. Would make a shorter headline be the sideways text, as it is difficult to read, but overall great start!
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Looks good, but I would (again :-D ) play with the typeface, is that Helvetica? Something else, even slightly different might be good. How about Titling Normal for "You are" and Bold for "Born"? http://tinyurl.com/ykq8dkx
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S. Preston Chuhon commented:Thanks. As you see, I'm making an attempt at a typography layout. I saw some great Helvetica designs that I used as inspirations. But maybe for this application, it's not quite the right font. I'll toy with it.
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Miro commented:Oops, I'm just now playing with your design and Helvetica is ok, you just need stronger contrast between the sizes. Smaller texts need to be smaller and the bigger ones bigger.
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Miro commented:
Here is one version: http://i37.tinypic.com/11l1pw1.jpg I don't know if it's better or not, just wanted to play around...
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S. Preston Chuhon commented:
Thanks Miro. That's really interesting. I need to add in a graphical element somehow. But really I understand how you're using text size and weight to draw the eye.
Interesting..... inspiring....
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S. Preston Chuhon commented:
:D I almost fell off my chair. I'm jealous! You're really good with the typography. Not to mention jealous you have time to mess around with design concepts.
I'm going to let your first one stew in the old noggin' for a while, and I might 'borrow' some ideas!
Cheers
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Miro commented:
Thank you, thank you! I had to do it, it was so much fun. You have such a strong idea in your work that it made it easy. ;-)
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its too bussy with text rest is simply nice...
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Typography needs work. Like the colors and concept. Contact info could stand out more than "registering now" - it's more important to remember the website info.
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S. Preston Chuhon commented:
Thanks Danelle. Actually, you can't register on the website, (it's by mail-in/ fax registration). And using the old AIDA formula, I'm looking for the action to be "Register Now", not "go see the website".
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Danelle Bailey commented:In that case, I would switch the website and phone number, and make the phone number stand out, with Register Now secondary in size, but also in red.
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Great work, just post a update with new type.
MEster.
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hmm i think, good design and presentation. congratulations
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The main message is delivered well, but the details are somewhat hard to gather.
As a player, I want to know competition levels, the team size, which you have. (It is hard to find in the sideways text, but I like the design concept)
I also would like to know the nights/ times of play, the surface (hardwood or turf) and the ball (futsol or soccer?)
Will your target audience know the details of Peakes Field House (if so, they probably know about the type of game on offer).
I like the call to action, but I would make it more direct: "Register now" vs "registering now"
I think the old school icon is effective-- much better than a newer player
I would reduce the info on the poster, and push them to the details/ contact info
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S. Preston Chuhon commented:
Thanks Jim. This league has been running for a couple two years, and Victoria is not a large city. But that's my excuses!
I'll add this to my list of updates! You (as a player) are asking valid questions that need answering. Cheers
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I decided not to mention typography in my description, wondering how quickly you all will pick up on my typography needs!!! That was a quick text. Thanks for your feedback.