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The sky looks a bit gloomy, it would look better with the sun shining over the mountain.
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I love this design very original. Just add a footer and reduce the film case.
Bye
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The content layout is kinda scattered. The header is cool, the film cannisters are cool, but everthing in between is kinda messing. I would just try some new layout ideas for the content.
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The design is really eye catching. Maybe you could add a few grunge effects to the logo just to add to that retro, vintage feel. Good job!
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Josh Jackson commented:Hi Troy. Thank you for the kind words -- and for the adjectives that escaped me late last night when I was posting this concept. A "retro, vintage feel" is exactly the style I am going for. Personally, I like the "Savannah" logo just about as is, but I'm not digging the "presents" area, nor the intro text area. Any ideas?
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I like your color theme for the site and even the header picture. I think the film strip and reel are over done. I would rather see that as a secondary element rather than the main design. This site also doesn't give me the impression that the Savannah Company knows what they are doing. The gray strip at the top seems random and out of place as well. I see what you are going for here but I don't think this design pulls it off for me.
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Josh Jackson commented:
Hi Nate. Thanks for your comments. I certainly can dial back the film strip a bit. If you'll re-read my description for this design, you'll see that the gray bar at the top represents where the banner ad will go. Placement and size of that ad are non-negotiable I'm afraid.
Also, you'll note this site is being created by a newspaper -- not a company. Its purpose is just to highlight four films created in the Savannah area. Make sense?
Perhaps I could have explained that better in my description. In light of what I've just told you, any other advice would be helpful. Thanks.
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Josh Jackson commented:
You know, looking back at the site concept, the film strip size compared with the reel is a bit off. Maybe reducing the size or just deleting the reel will help. I'll play with it when I get to work later today.
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Nate Hamilton commented:Yeah, that does make more sense to me know. I was thinking along the lines of this being a company website, so I apologize for the incorrect info.
However I still feel the film strips are overdone.I don't mind the footer film strip. The other film strips at the top bother me. I would for sure get rid of the film strip for each individual movie and just use a regular border.
All in all, if your look for a website that works for the purpose of just a promotions type of website...I think this works even as is. I wouldn't nit pick the details as much seeing that this really is just a promotions website. Hope that helps.
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i really like this. I think you conveyed what you wanted to convey with all of the elements in the design. Love the header design as well.
The only thing i would work on, is blending the text - the part that it says "the first line might...." all of that paragraph - better with the design.
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Josh Jackson commented:
I agree. That's the quandary I'm in -- how to blend those better. Based on what I've been told by our Web folks, that amount of dummy text you see now is roughly the same amount of live copy I'll get. Any ideas? Maybe use a different font?
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Daniel Suarez commented:I think the main problem with it is the colors in that paragraph. Maybe it's just an easy fix, as to make the white a little darker (12% gray) and the yellow a little more earth color (but still yellow).
Great job though
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I would say a few things.
First, shout out to peeps in Savannah! Born and raised...San Anton Drive, represent, represent! Sorry...
Don't waste that banner space with just gray. If you integrate it into the site, you might find more use for it. For instance, having a banner align left and possibly a link to other advertisers, more information, advertising link, etc.
Being that the Savannah sign is pretty plain (just meaning that there isn't much going on besides the text), is there a way to reduce it and emphasize the other parts of the site?
I don't get this is a news site. It feels kind of static (this is from a function perspective). Link me to articles, Link me to specific things from the database, not just the database as a whole. Maybe take a cue from imdb.com here.
All in all, I think you have a good idea, you just need to re-think the function and make the main things the main things. Right now the main thing seems to be that savannah graphic, and everything else has less importance.
You going to Geekend?
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Josh Jackson commented:
Hello Doy. I actually lived in Alabama most of my life and have been in Pooler for about 4 years now.
OK, let's hit this point by point: 1. Unfortunately, it will be a rotating banner ad. The size and placement are non-negotiable I am told. Also, I found out there will be an ad placed to right of this concept, outside of the area shown. Not sure how that's going to look, but that's not my choice to make. 2. The size is actually borderline being too small I've been told, so I don't think reducing it will be an option. 3. This will be a topic page on the Savannah Morning News site featuring only these four movies -- so yes, this page will be quite static. I'll post each movie's page once I get them designed.
Hope all that makes sense. There are some unusual parameters in place, but that's the sandbox I have to work with.
I hope to go to Geekend if I am off work. I guess you are going?
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Doy Cave commented:I'm speaking at Geekend, but I'm REALLY excited about the other speakers there. Awesome that David Carson will be in Savannah. I was designing in the late 90's, so he was kind of like a rock star then.
Anyways... Banner: I didn't mean to change the size or location of the banner. I just meant that you should integrate the space into the site more...color, function, etc. Rotating banner ads aren't required to be centered and on a totally different background color. I just mean to make it look less like a sore thumb and more a part of the site.
Size: The site is skinny at 728px, but even at 550px (where you have it now), the savannah sign is almost 130px tall...probably close to 150px + when at full size. I just think the sign is eating space you could use for something else.
Misc: What's in the database? Anything interesting? Are there details about these movies you might want to highlight? Any interesting facts about their production? I think your design is on the right track...I'm just trying to get you to think more about drawing the user into the site.
You were looking for ways to offset the text better. I think you could gain space by rethinking how large some items are on the page.
Great work, though...and great stuff on your portfolio, too!
