A comic about a monkey in love would be AWESOME. Is he a monkey?
IF he (or she?) is a monkey remember they do not have protruding noses so the profile might look like this:
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| 1 | I like the facial expressions :) |
| 2 | It's leaning forward and walking like zombies.. |
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| 1 | I like the idea of single teeth... making foolishness pretty obvious. |
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| 1 | I assume you will working on the detailing part so no comment here. |
Hi Haider,
Hahaha LOL...This Monkey does look absolute fool to me and I think you are pretty close to see it coming alive.
some of things I added as notes which I think may help you to polish your concept further.
I think I can help you in story boarding, however, I am in between something urgent so will share the same over the email.
Thanks, Warish
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ack - the </ul> tag deleted on me. Ah well - I think it's still readable :)
Serina,
I have the original in a TextEdit file. If you send me an email, I will send you the file. Then, when you copy and paste, your comment will be formatted correctly. (If you're not on a Mac, I can send it in a MS Word file.)
If anybody else would like to use this text, let me know and I'll send you the file.
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SketchWould have to be honest and say that I don't understand the concept. | |
We will need more explanation of where you plan on taking this idea.
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| nice | |
I would make the eyes bigger, to make him feel more human. Right now he feels a bit scary.
Hey Alex... I love your suggestion. This is something I wanted to achieve :)
I like your idea about "A monkey in love" I will work around with it and will share the progress with you. Anything else you have in your mind?
Thanks, Haider