ZoomConcept Reviews
Minor Problem on home.jpg 1 Nice, but needs a better font and maybe a different angle. 2 I don't like this representation of a portfolio piece as a whole. The background is too boring, the black stroke is too outdated and doesn't go with the shading of a sidebar. The white line is too distracting and faded only on one side, which looks unfinished to me. Fonts are wrong. Information about a piece could be displayed more dramatically, in a more interesting way. 3 Spacing and font of the heading 4 Very good idea, overlaying rules! Serious Problem on home.jpg 1 Buttons look outdated. The big black arrow ruins them. 2 Too much navigation and too small 3 You have 3 different fonts on your site, but this serif one does not go with the rest. Also, fonts throughout the site have different styling, sizes etc. Looks a bit chaotic and coincidental. Positive Feature on home.jpg 1 Bad typography. Change the font, play more with the heading. Summary:
Love the business cards! So modern and professional. I wonder how long did it took to create them, and how long did it took to prepare a graphic for the site. It feels like you were inspired by your logo and created the cards in instant touch of inspiration. The website looks like you had a hard time designing, not really sure what to do and how. Judging by the cards, you can do so much better. And you should.
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Giulia Toscano commented:you are right, I can do better, your constructive criticism helps to improve, thank you!
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Giulia Toscano commented:
I made some changes with your advices, I think now is quite better. Let me know what you think
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Minor Problem on home2.jpg 1 what is this? seems completely out of line -
Giulia Toscano commented:
is a reference to the main page that links to my brother's site and mine. If you see in this page http://www.itoscano.com/ by clicking on the right figure you get to my site. Okay maybe in this template it's a little bit misplaced
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Chris Wieckowski commented:Yeah, it's like it landed completely from nowhere :) find a right place for it and describe it, cause nobody will know what it actually is.
2 Tacky gradient, polish it more 3 icons to the left :) 4 Again boxes in boxes. But you have a nice thing with the Diventimi.it piece. It's skewed and it looks nice with that box underneath. The rest is like lego blocks Minor Problem on home.jpg 1 Like Darinka said. It's skewed rather than rotated and it's not looking good. 2 This needs a complete redesign. I think you know that :) -
Giulia Toscano commented:
I know :)
3 This footer gradient is so 90s. Make it shine! If you only want to leave a copyright note then you don't need such large and wide stripe to take up space Serious Problem on home.jpg 1 This should be somewhere really standing out. Place your photo, people immidiately focus on faces. Critical Problem Capitals
There's too much capital letters all over the design. You should leave it regular. It' easier to read. Leave it only on the elements which REALLY need to be emphasized.Mixing of styles
There are some glossy elements, some grunge elements and some 'retro' elements. Mixing them all in one piece doesn't do much good. Pick one and go with it.New Idea Remember Remember
To use the AIDA or any other perception model and stick to itNew Idea on home.jpg 1 There's too much whitespace. Narrow it down. This whole area is very boxy and there's a box with a box etc. You should make it look more out of the box 2 Darinka already said it - too much, too dull. Narrow it down to necessary minimum. Drop the capitals. Maybe use different icons for each element Summary:
I get the feeling that you didn't spend much time on that. Almost all of the details aren't really polished. There's still much work to do in my opinion. I hope my points prove helpfull
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Giulia Toscano commented:
Thank you for your comment. I will do other changes following your advice: the first design already was a new version of the second one, but of course it needs more work, do you think it's improving or should I reset all and start again?
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Chris Wieckowski commented:
Website doesn't create a business, so if you can't come up with something new soon - you should post it, but you shouldn't leave it as it is.
Now an insight into my design process. You can go to the 960px grid, there are some templates to download and print out. Then write down what all the blocks your page will consist of and fit them to some marketing model. Afterwards draw them or cut the blocks out of pieces of paper. Try to align them on the printed out template. Sort out the details on paper - then take it to photoshop.
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Minor Problem on home2.jpg 1 don't think you need to state your skills here. I would assume that your work would show what skills and software you can use. If you really want to say this stuff put it into your resume. 2 I think people would understand that this is a portfolio page the big text seems misplaced. I would have your name in this font. 3 seems unnecessary to have two navigation for your projects. The thumbnails are much more attractive and those are what most people will use to navigate. I would take out that whole left column and extend your thumbnails across. Minor Problem on home.jpg 1 this line is really rough looking, stands out as out of place with the otherwise clean design. 2 too bulky, stands out too much for what it is. I would use a simple text link. Minor Problem on IMG_1146.jpg 1 This shade of green and this texture treatment is too generic. A slightly different green and a different pattern might be more interesting . Serious Problem on home2.jpg 1 seems out of place. not really sure what this is. Kind of looks like a bloody cotton ball. -
Giulia Toscano commented:
as I said to Chris Wieckowski, it'is a reference to the main page that links to my brother's site and mine http://www.itoscano.com/ two negative comments = I will remove it :)
2 same here, rough lines in an otherwise clean looking layout. Critical Problem on home2.jpg 1 these don't align. I know you might have done this on purpose but it seems off mainly because nothing else has the same treatment. Positive Feature on home2.jpg 1 I prefer this layout over the other one. Seems to be better put together. -
Giulia Toscano commented:
this is a good news
New Idea what does graphics stand for? Is this a name of your company?A bit too generic if that is the case. I which case I would definitely ditch the "welcome to my portfolio" line. New Idea on home2.jpg 1 rounded corners in an otherwise straight site. doesn't match the rest of the site. Also the gradient is very different from the rest of the graphic treatment. 2 maybe too big. doesn't line up very well with the header. 3 there is a subtle black and white background behind here, maybe try running it further across the page, right now looks a bit muddy. -
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Love the green onn the black, really makes it stand out and draws attention to those certain areas.
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Giulia Toscano commented:
thank you!
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that is the list of the works, to get to them faster