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Minor Problem on homepage.jpg 1 maybe try moving navigation "buttons" few pixels up? (just my opinion) 2 bad positioned icons you are supposed to use them to catch visitor s eye, but you are doing it wrong 3 use border/shadow/something for this foto? 4 use color for Headlines? for example red one you have allready used in header, maybe darker Serious Problem on homepage.jpg 1 whats this? replace it with slider/banner/flash video can be moved to content part Positive Feature on homepage.jpg 1 I like this ;) (howewer the question is what s NCHS TSA?) Other on homepage.jpg 1 socialize, try making it more interesting & usable Summary:
At the momment it looks like "chess club s website" (just a joke, no offense), i mean its bo...zzz....oring.
See notes for some info/ideas what to change.
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Jamal Jackson commented:Thanks Martin
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Minor Problem on homepage.jpg 1 Menu size is too small and it does not match the context of the website. Serious Problem on homepage.jpg 1 Too much negative (empty) space 2 Not properly styled ... I suggest you use a grid to align your designs, and try to keep the elements fixed on your design, give them "anchors" or they will seem to float around Critical Problem on homepage.jpg 1 Your events do not have a date, the whole bottom section seems to me like an afterthought. Do not put content just to fill an empty area and use real data to fill it in. Lorem ipsum will look very nice but it doesn't replicate real text. New Idea on homepage.jpg 1 This could be much bigger or replaced by a banner. 2 I would use different sepparators and make them look like links. Other on homepage.jpg 1 I don't get the shelf... or the TV ... do you really need them? Summary:
Hey Jamal,
I can't say I like the design, there are some nice elements, but the rest is not so great.
I think you should put more thought into the designs, maybe make use of wireframes first. This would give you an overall solid structure to build on. This is your main weakness in this design. It lacks structure and consistency.
Sorry to be the bad guy here ;)
Zeno.
Minor Problem on homepage.jpg 1 try putting these on right side below VIE 2 include a picture and then followed by text Critical Problem on homepage.jpg 1 Too Big a banner to place a small video...consider a slider for variety to display. Summary:
Hi Jamal,
I understand the site is on very preliminary design level. And this is the point where you must seek feedback :-)
Well, the design is very simple. When you say it is for High School club, I guess, target audiences are very young, full of energy and expect to see more vibrancy than a sophisticated Corporate Look website.
And this could be achieved by some modification I guess.
So, my feedback in two parts, reaction and suggestions, and as follows:
My Reaction:
Banner : Way too big. Looks plane and empty. Too big to accommodate the small video.
The Body : Looks very simple. Just like another website. Didn't expect to see a high school club website like this. :-) Honestly.
Colors : Blue looks good, but not that impressive. To me.
My advice:
Banner: Make use of pictures and videos in form of slider. And reduce the height of the banner. Some faces, events, and all, you know, pictures showing some energy.
Menu: Make them more prominent using some gradients background. Say, each one different in color would make it lively and follow the same color to identify the pointed page!!
Blog Events Tweets: Place them on right hand side to make space for content and some more graphic as i pointed out in your image.
Have quickly visualized the design and attached a mock up .
Have a look and , I hope you find the inputs good and hope they are helpful.
All the best, great going, some changes and it will be awesome, am sure!
cheers
Prashant
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Martin Bloksa commented:Like the mockup, we re thinking in this case the same way
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Prashant Dubey commented:
OK, like minded people, huh :-)) cool!!
You know i saw yr comments, at times, you don't need 'welcome' etc stuff, looks amateurish, i feel.
And if banner is too big, then do not separate out, let it merge in graduation form and give it a look of 'fluid'
Hope am not getting tooo abstract...hope you got the point.
thanks for comment, pal ;-)
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Jamal Jackson commented:
Hi Parashat,
My first intention would be for the banner area to be a nivo slider with thumbnails of recent blog posts, but then I remembered that there is a good chance that the other club members wouldn't post thumbnail images, so I scraped it.
The color scheme can't be changed because those are the school colors.
For the menu, I am planning on using gradient transitions for hover states.
Thanks, Jamal
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Prashant Dubey commented:
I understand the limitations Jamal, its the boundary in which you got to work. :-)
Good to hear that you're planning a gradient for menu :-)
All the best, will be watching this concept.
cheers Prashant
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Minor Problem on homepage.jpg 1 whats this? Serious Problem on homepage.jpg 1 needs to be in one column and then something else in the other Critical Problem on homepage.jpg 1 where's the shadow? this is floating? design 101 man! Summary:
Jamal, I know that you are a talented designer, so the heading is appropriate...
I expected better, there are fundamental flaws to this design. Think about things like footer, and columns, three at the bottom yet your welcome text is spread across two, it can be done but it will look alot better if it's the same.
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Jamal Jackson commented:
Thanks Aaron,
The last site I designed nobody liked, so I now am doing something that will please everyone in the club. It's still just being roughed out, I only worked on it about half a day so far, so expect for all the kinks to be worked out.
Thanks, Jamal ^_^
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Zeno Popovici commented:A small note Jamal: You can't please everybody. Just design something usable and nice that a majority would like.
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Minor Problem on homepage.jpg 1 The table and flat screen graphic are unnecessary. If you want to keep the design simple just a black border for the video viewer would be better than an unrelated graphic. Serious Problem on homepage.jpg 1 Move this to make it more prominent. 2 Too much blank space. Critical Problem on homepage.jpg 1 The layout lacks balance. You have dark and wide elements on top, so you need a dark wide something at the bottom to balance the design. Summary:
I think the biggest improvement to this draft would be to add an element to the bottom of the design so that the total look is more balanced. I like the way the top menu and colors look, it just looks unbalanced to me.
I think you could separate the events out from the blog and tweet sections. To me it seems like "one of these things is not like the other." Usually, you really want to draw people to events info. I think moving this to the header part next to the video would give you a way to add more content to that section and increase the visibility of the events information.
cool suggestions, pal! And if you see my review, I totally agree with your banner point, to replace with some flash or moving content like slider.
great!!